[omegadragonoidMember]

Mah new fanfic shall include a new battle style. I shall include people in this fanfic from BB. I shall choose who I want.Chapter 1: The Gateway to the RuinsDarkus Brawler was walking home from school and when he got home, his dad was on the phone. "What do you mean?" "I mean there is a secret." "I am coming there now." DB's dad hung up the phone. " What is it dad?" "I am going to investigate." " Can I come?" "No", said his father.DB hid in his dad's truck as he went to investigate. When they got there, they were greeted by DB's dad's colleague. "Come check this out." My dad saw that I was there and said, "What are you doing here son?" " I came to investigate too." "Damn it, I told you to stay home." "Fine, you can stay." "Yayz!" When they went inside, they saw an inscription of an unknown language. Then, at that precise moment, a voice started sing a sad tune. Then, Darkus Brawler was sucked into a bright portal of light.....To Be Continued.....

[Num1RockerMember]

whoa, this is good, i wonder where hes going to end up 😉

[Darkus BrawlerMember]

Thanks for including me lol, this looks pretty cool. Can't wait 'til the next chapter!

[YoshipatrolMember]

Well you went from a 3rd person persective to a 1st person which was really odd, and every time a new character starts talking is suppoed to be the start of a new paragraph. It was kind of confusing for me to read that lolBTW thats really short why don't you guys write anything longer?

[omegadragonoidMember]

since i am liking this fanfic, i shall make another chapter nao:Chapter 2:The Ancient ProphecyAfter DB got sucked through the portal, he woke up..........."Where am I?" His Darkus Zenon Knight awoke. "I believe we are in some strange land," said Zenon Knight. "Of course we are," said DB. They walked for miles. He eventually reached a little hut in the woods. " I believe we should go inside." "I agree." *Creak* went the door. "Hello, anybody here?" No answer. "Hello?" He came upon a lighted room. He went inside. Inside was a little man, shorter than DB. "Hello?" "Yes, hello, who are you?" "I am Darkus Brawler." "OMG, you are the legendary chosen one!" "What are you talking about?" "You are the legendary soldier in the prophecy." DB said," Explain." "Ok, so there is this prophecy that one day a legendary soldier wielding a little monster in ball-form. You are destined to pass the Trial of the Dungeons and defeat the evil Remora." "WTF is Remora?" asked Darkus Brawler. " Remora is the evil spirit that controls all of this land, you must gather a team of the 6 attributed monsters and defeat the evil." "So I have to defeat evil?" "Yes, you do." "Okay, I accept."........To Be Continued.....

[omegadragonoidMember]

does anybody like mah new fanfic?

[Num1RockerMember]

i love itttt ;D ;D

[AdminKeymaster]

I haven't read it, the paragraphs aren't separated, making it far to difficult to read…

[YoshipatrolMember]

I haven't read it, the paragraphs aren't separated, making it far to difficult to read...

Well you went from a 3rd person persective to a 1st person which was really odd, and every time a new character starts talking is suppoed to be the start of a new paragraph. It was kind of confusing for me to read that lolBTW thats really short why don't you guys write anything longer?

Tooooooooooooooooold you

[Num1RockerMember]

well i think its okay, im hoping for the part when he finds the other warriors lol

[Darkus BrawlerMember]

I give it support cuz I'm in it lol, but if I can give a little advice OD make your chapters longer. Like 3 to 4 times longer XD

[omegadragonoidMember]

can do DB, i'll make them a little later and i'll make them longer

[omegadragonoidMember]

here's next chapter:Chapter 3:The Formation of a TeamDarkus Brawler was walking near a pond when suddenly......a person jumped out in front of him. "My name is Spin Hydranoid, let's brawl NOW!!!" "Let's do it.""1 on 1 battle."Both: "Go, bakugan reader!"Both: "Gate card set!"DB: "I'll go first."DB: "Bakugan brawl! Darkus Zenon Knight StandSH: "Ah.....so you have the legendary Zenon Knight eh?"SH: Bakugan brawl! Aquos Landor stand!Bakugan Reader: Darkus Zenon Knight at 660 gs, Aquos Landor at 660 gsSH: "We are evenly matched, interesting."DB: ability card activate, Zenon Blade!BR: Zenon Knight +500 gs Landor -500 gsBR: Zenon Knight at 1160 gs, Landor at 160 gsSH: Triple Ability activate, storm surge + Ocean Saber + Wave Ripper UpgradeBR: storm surge adds 350 gs, Ocean Saber adds 600 gs, and Wave Ripper upgrade adds 200 gsBR: Landor at 1310 gsDB: ability activate, Triple Fusion Blade, Zenon, Neon, and XenonBR: Triple Fusion Blade adds 600 gsBR: Zenon Knight at 1760 gsDB: I win.SH: Damn it.DB: do you want to join me on my quest?SH: what is it about?*DB tells SH about the prophecy*SH: i will join your quest.They walk in a gusty forest. "I can feel something Spin Hydranoid." "I can too Darkus Brawler." ZOOM! "What was that noise?" *a figure comes out* "I have heard much about you, and i want to join your quest, I am a ventus brawler of bakugan." "Sure you can join." "My ventus Quazartine is ready to help you. My name is Narutopwns."They walked by a volcano and

[omegadragonoidMember]

do you like it?

[Num1RockerMember]

i love it so far, but i thought i was in it lol

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