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Episode 2Colby says," But Mrs.Doyle please I didnt know it was here I think I left it at home!"

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Episode 3Intercom"First up colby verses tiuler!"

[YoshipatrolMember]

Its really rushed, and kinda boring TBH. When I read the first part, it sounded like you were telling a story at a camp fire or something. Of ocurse one issues that seems to need addressing everywhere is SPELLING! For goodness sake use spell check or something and copy paste it here.

[wilpokeMember]

Yoshi. Thanks for the tips. Ill try to make it slower and Ill try to speel good this time. but I think it's kind of interesting cause colby has to go HEAD TO HEAD with tyler. And wil has to go head to head with a pyrus brawler.

[YoshipatrolMember]

Yoshi. Thanks for the tips. Ill try to make it slower and Ill try to speel good this time. but I think it's kind of interesting cause colby has to go HEAD TO HEAD with tyler. And wil has to go head to head with a pyrus brawler.

Well I'm as guilty as most video game reviewers are, I only read the first 2 chapters. And I just despise school in stories unless there's gonna be massive dialogue lol But I'm sure it will progress as it goes on. I mean I've seen plenty of movies that just sucked in the beginning but then became awesome at the end. SO yeah just keep working at it, and make sure to get some correct speeling (< lol, intentional)BTW FYI if you odn't know what my reference in the first sentence was here ya go: A lot of game reviewers will just play through like half the game before deciding whether it was good or not, I had only read the first 2 chapters...kinda similar.

[wilpokeMember]

Yoshi thanks. I can add you in the story. Just send me you charecter name the bakugan you want to use and some cards.

[YoshipatrolMember]

Yoshi thanks. I can add you in the story. Just send me you charecter name the bakugan you want to use and some cards.

Oh... I'm honored really, but I need some time to ponder it

[Metaaltair825Member]

I like it so far.

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Tyler said,”Alright but how do our bakugan turn into monster form with no gate card”

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Tokumi said,”I better go return this bakugan to my friend jaron.”

[wilpokeMember]

OK so when wil and his friends go to find jaron they get into a brawl but colby wants to ake it so they leave him behind while he battles.

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